[Brad]

Great work Lilbelle, I remember your previous read. Definite improvement!
I might add thinking about being excited as you read this… not more volume but excitement in your voice. Imagine telling about a cool thing you just did. We tell friends fun things with a different kind of animation. Just as a suggestion.
Also it seems you may have run out of breath at the end. ‘at staying here’ sort of dropped off. Perhaps try to find other places to get your catch breath to be able to complete the line.
again great work!