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Love the lead in! It’s a great read, keeping to the specs nicely. I love how you slightly over-pronounce the word “fuel” at :20. It gives it a friendly, natural tone. Tough to find flaws, but if there was anything, consider the tone on the words “energy management system.” Seems like it runs with the rest of the sentence. Consider separating that component with the slightest pause to emphasize what you are talking about next, giving the reader a chance to transition their thoughts to the energy management system from the previous topic (the car being propelled). “The energy management system determines….” Super minor thought, but it was the only place I lost focus on the topic. Great read Tom!