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Hey, Daniel. Thanks for the feedback. This looked like a problem/solution structure to me, and I imagined “kids were” as the first solution in the first half. Then, in the second half, the answer was the discovery that leaders could be nurtured or “grown,” which fits into the whole theme of agriculture and progress. So, I tried to emphasize these moments with a little smile, inflection, and elongated syllables (e.g. they’re grown). Also, I figured this is part of a corporate video that would target adult leadership and investors at some kind of convention or on a website. That’s why I went with less inflection. I’ll pick a more kid-directed script next and use more inflection on that one. Again, I really appreciate the careful listen. Bill A.