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Another nice read. Some comments. The choice to emphasize ‘you’ in “Butterball brings YOU the joys of Turkey day” feels odd. I feel like you can play more with the unexpected twist of what seems to be a traditional holiday message turning to the cool novelty of grilling in the summer. A bit more amazement on “surprisingly juicy”, as if you were surprised yourself. Basically, a little more of a “wink” to the listener. The voice is great. Like butter. 🙂 Just have more fun with the text.
