[katelyndawnvo]

Hi there! I love this script and I think your energy and passion for this topic is coming through, you have great energy for this commercial! There are a few things that stood out to me. You emphasized the word “and” in ” and the feeling” but you should be emphasizing the word “feeling”. And is not really ever the important word, but the thing that comes after it is. You treated the list really nicely “Crisp, flavorful, and never too sweet” because you have a different feel and intention behind each part of the list. There were a couple of times you pitched down which could get in the way of sounding positive. You pitched down on the word “refresher”. So these are just a couple things that stood out to me, but nice work! 🙂