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Hi Mary!
Really enjoyed your read and the pace of it! One recommendation I have is that some of your sentences prior to the commas can sound a bit like a question. For instance this line “With retail partners like Walmart…” your pitch is down-up… and perhaps making it more of a confident statement – some pitch and tone on both syllables for Walmart, may make it feel more powerful. Really enjoy listening to your voice!
-Amber