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Hi Kathy! Good read! I think the pacing and clarity were good, but the tone on “…from our carefully selected springs” sounded a little flat to me, maybe “carefully” could have been emphasized a little more to vary the pitch a little? I was thinking about what has not changed since 1845 for this company and it’s possibly the fact that they CAREFULLY select the springs, vs. use just any water, so that makes it more important to emphasize in my mind.
I did not mind the “a hundred” vs. “one hundred” on this one; it sounded appropriate for the script. Overall very good!
Mary
