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Wow, awesome job on this long read, R! Your voice is perfect for this kind of script!
I echo what others have said. My feedback is that I noticed you changed a line, left out, or flipped a word with some lines.
These are the ones I noticed.
Had just settled down for a long winter’s nap, — (you said “had just settled our brains”)
As dry leaves that before the wild hurricane fly, — (left out “dry”)
He was dressed all in fur, from his head to his foot, — (you flipped the words, and said, “in all”)
And the beard of his chin was as white as the snow; — (you said “on”)
He had a broad face and a little round belly, … (you flipped the words, and said, “round little”)
