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Hi Robert, really nice read! I think your voice is a perfect fit for copy like this. I like the second read better for pacing. The only constructive thing would be that last line “That’s how we run.” To me I feel like a throwaway line in the middle of a script and didn’t feel definitive. Perhaps you could make that last line distinctive. Maybe emphasizing the word “that’s” and have a small pause after. “That’s (mini beat) how we run”. Just an idea. It feels like it needs a confident definitive ending.