[TimDKietzman]

Your take on the script was a nice touch. I’d normally expect a more excited tone for a shoe commercial, but your spin on it worked amazingly well. Your pausing makes the script a sound a little choppy, but since you’re relaxed and doing it at the end of each sentence, it works into the read great. Just remember, you mustn’t pause in the middle of a sentence like you do at the end and generally you should avoid hitting the words at the end of the sentence. Keep up the good work!