[JamesB]

Good job! You have variety throughout the read and nailed emphasis on those ‘money’ words, drawing my attention to them. The delivery sounded conversational, perhaps more like speaking to colleagues on the topic than one-on-one conversation but I think that works for this script. It sounds like you have natural pauses breaking up the word flow making it sound more conversational, but there are times when it sounds almost a little rushed to my ear. That could be reverb from your recording space causing the pause to sound shorter than it actually is, so maybe nothing. Again, good job!