Reply To: Feedback Forum
Homepage › Forums › Click here for the Feedback Forum! › Feedback Forum › Reply To: Feedback Forum
October 25, 2022 at 6:09 pm
#81073
RCampos
Participant
Hi Silver Wit,
I like what you’re doing in version 2, but overall, I prefer version 1 because it’s cleaner and clearer. Version 2 gives me a sense that you’re acting out the headache, and this thought distracts me a bit from your words. I like how you vary the intonation on: throbbing, tension and pain – but I think a more upbeat ending might help. I would appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!