[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback PrettyLoud! I will try a completely over the top version and post it here, thanks for the suggestion. How far can it be pushed? That’s something I would like to know. Thanks for listening!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Mitch, thanks for the feedback! I will try a more enticing / seductive version and see how it goes, thanks for the suggestion! In my head it starts to feel too over the top, but then a lot of advertising is over the top but accepted – it just might work for a broccoli add. Thanks again!

Mary

[mkell755]

Thanks for the feedback Elvie! I’m working to smooth things out, so thanks!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Tom, great work! Very helpful feel to this one. Sounds warm and patient and not folksy or patronizing – well done!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Tom, very nice! Definitely warm and reassuring. Very clear and straightforward. Your voice is very well-suited for this genre!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Tom, very nice! Good recording quality and great lead-in too. Your voice is warm and welcoming and informational. Good pacing to help the listener keep up with what you are telling the,\m. Very good!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Cynthia! Welcome! Good job on these. I liked all 3 of them, and the nice textured rasp in your voice!
Script 1: Good energy and attitude. You might try a slight micro-pause after “kids were!” to help get the point across that 4H is all about the kids leading themselves for just a little bit more emphasis. Small thing!
Script 2: Good read. Good variation of the list of items starting from at about 23 seconds at “company polices,…” to the end of the script.
Script 3: Sounded quite a bit quieter than the other two. Also it seemed like the first phrase was a little disconnected from the rest of the sentence – “no matter where we live,” sounded like “no matter where we live.” (with a period, not a comma) , I think for the phrase to make sense it should flow just a little better if that makes sense. Good job!

Mary

Mary

[mkell755]

Hello there! Here are 2 reads of the same script for any and all feedback. Which one sounds more believable for the script (if either)? I’m also interested in the sound levels and quality of the recording. I tried Normalizing the recording on Audacity per some earlier suggestions, let me know know if it helped (or created other issues!) ha. Thank you to everyone for listening and offering input!

Mary

Birds Eye: Cheddar Broccoli Bake
Introducing the Cheddar Broccoli Bake from Birds Eye. A creamy, gooey, melty, deliciously decadent way to eat broccoli….Yes Please! Birds Eye – a new twist on veggies.

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[mkell755]

Hi Kristen, really good work! You sounded really friendly and approachable. I like the smile and attitude in your voice in the first read – nice! Good pacing and energy for all of them.

I agree, the volume on the first one was low, and the other two had good (higher) volumes. Very nice work, keep it up!

Mary

[mkell755]

Hi Kristen, thanks for the feedback! Yes some of those words show my accent for sure! 🙂 Thanks for listening and the nice comments – it is appreciated!

Mary

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