[RCampos]

I like the attitude in this read a lot – it gets my attention. Your clarity and diction is great, but there are a few little spots I’d like to point out. The “x” in complex and the “ss” in boss get a little lost. Maybe your tone is dropping here at the end of the phrase? The only other note I have is that Burts Bees should probably get a bit more oomph, since they’re paying for the spot. I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thank you!