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Hi Gill! Your Airoptic take is so natural, i really like how it sounds. diction sounds clear and i’d say your flow is allllmost there; although i like how much real estate you’re taking up with the first sentence, there are some pauses near the end of the copy that sound like periods instead of commas. where ever it is that you start sentences with “and” and “because”, the sentence before does sound like a complete thought. maybe its a copy thing, because you do seem to pick it up with a lot of energy each time. either way, great work!
Gigi
