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Nice voice and tone overall.

The National Ad has so many “Backs” within the script that they all seemed to take center stage if that makes sense. I was not sure if it was intentional but made my ear stop. The first “back” being a body part may not need to be as strong as others. It might be fun to “rev” up your “backs”. Have fun with the word and the varied meanings within the script. Hope that helps.

The Subway read I really felt connected like you were talking to me. I imagined my choices and was excited about lunch. YUM