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brucem
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Hi Bill,
I liked your tone of voice and delivery. There was a nice pause after the first sentence, letting the initial question sink in before proceeding. I think you should have a similar pause before the the sentence “Now is time”. That sentence shifts the tone of the piece to a call-to-action which would stand out better if there was a longer pause between it and the previous sentence.