[TimDKietzman]

Your read is well done overall, good tempo, well placed inflections, and you sounded quite conversational. Only problem I can find is that you don’t sound particularly interested in what your reading. If you want people to enjoy what your explaining in your narration script, you need to convince them that you find it interesting too. Also, your inflections at the end of the sentences aren’t natural, try speaking them like statements, that’ll help.