[TimDKietzman]

Your voice is very fitting for this type of script and I think you pulled off a fitting tempo and hit the right words. Your read doesn’t sound too natural though. To pull off a conversational read, you need to speak each sentence like a statement whenever it doesn’t have a question mark or an exclaimation. Your read doesn’t match the words either, made the strangeness all the more obvious. I hope this helps.