[aylinsings]

Hi Brad! Great work on these!

Stanley Steamer: I do think that it is on the conversational side. That being said, I think you need to make sure the client name pops. It all seemed to morph together. I tend to pitch down too so what helps me is literally writing on the page where I want to go up or down. Also, the ‘call today and save” sounded like a question. But awesome first take!!

Home Depot: This is pretty conversational! I think just make sure to connect with the material and also really focus on the one person you are speaking to.

Junk: Great! No notes

Hope that helps!!

Aylin