[JustJohn]

Overall, I think this is quite good. I think the pace is fine, and the tone is good. You mentioned having a couple of extra-hard plosives in this read. I hear that, and I wonder if it might partly be the result of over-stressing words that don’t need to be stressed that much. “Power” and “double” sound less like you’re naturally stressing them, and more like you decided to stress them, if that makes any sense. The emphasis in “you could” seems a little bumpy as well. Again, though, there’s a lot of good stuff in this read. I think you have a good sense of the pace, and your tone overall is a natural, “relatable” one. I think you’re generally hitting the pause lengths just fine.