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Avatarirvj
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Good read, great tone and pacing and your voice is just right for this copy. I’m probably just nitpicking here but in your 2nd line, maybe shorten the pauses between, maintained, fixed or replaced, so that it flows a little more smoothly. And maybe add a little more weight to “million” in your fourth line. Nice job!