[Sarah DeMike]

I enjoyed listening to your different takes on the same script. I think the second take was my favorite of the two. I agree with the previous poster that your read sounded a bit robotic. I think it might be based on your pitch. If you have less pitch variation, it sounds a bit more artificial. The other thing that might help your read would be to work on the flow of the sentences. If it feels like each sentence has a beginning, middle, and end, it might be more interesting for the listener. Good luck!